This week I attended a local writer's group meeting. I was given the opportunity to read a small portion of one of my works in progress. By read, I mean read out loud. Things sound different when one reads them out loud.
One thing I noticed while I was reading my own work was an issue with dialogue and the use of dialogue tags. Of course, this led to some research and this is what I found:
KEEP IT SIMPLE ... uh, I'll let you figure the last word out.
The most effective dialogue tag in almost all cases is a simple "said." For example:
"Put that spatula down and step away from the grill," she said.
Occasionally, one might need to put a name in place to distinguish who is doing the talking. Most often though, the name is not necessary as long as the writer firmly seats the readers mind in the scene. Sometimes, nothing at all is necessary.
By way of example, let me use a story most of you are familiar with (guys, you don't have to admit it if you don't want to) by Jane Austen, titled Pride and Prejudice. A couple of things demand my attention about the writer and her style in this story.
First, she used very few actual dialogue tags such as "said" in the story. In fact she wrote nearly entire chapters of dialogue and intelligently placed name anchors withing the context of the dialogue itself so that one always knows who is doing the talking and who is receiving.
On another note, one might notice that, throughout the entire story, Mr. and Mrs Bennet are never given first names. To this day, I could not tell you what their first names were, if they ever had them.
It is a skillful writer who can completely omit dialogue tags and still allow the reader to follow the rhythm and flow of communication. One of my favorite authors, Lee Child, is great at this. In fact, I think that he has just about perfected the "less is more" concept in dialogue. Sometimes his main character, Jack Reacher, doesn't say anything at all. In fact his part of the dialogue is simply and brilliantly written "Reacher said nothing."
Also important is to remember that dialogue should be used to show character traits and drive the story forward. In other words, and I'm especially guilty of this, do not just insert dialogue for the sake of having dialogue.
A great piece of advice that I wish I had originated (I'm just not that smart) is to break up dialogue with action. Have your character do something instead of trying to write down what you are trying to express using overbearing verbs and adverbs.
Sometimes action can even replace dialogue and have the same revealing effect.
I could provide a thousand examples of what not to do and at least two examples of what to do but, in the end, the best way to find the best dialogue is simply to read the passage, or passages aloud.
Friday, July 9, 2010
He said, she said: Dialogue Dilemma
at 4:15:00 PM
I am an old soldier, now reformed to backyard farmer, writer, blogger and aviation systems trainer. Although working on it, I've yet to earn the title of gentleman.
Things that interest me? Writing in numerous genres but mostly suspense, science fiction (speculative) and mystery. Outside of my full-time job, I love everything to do with aquaponic gardening and suburban homesteading. I often blog or post youtube videos about these subjects along with updates on my small typewriter collection, rants about our world's current state of affairs, surviving a zombie apocalypse or the antics of my backyard chickens.