tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8096600932757908629.post7412662263031587294..comments2023-06-18T06:20:32.471-05:00Comments on True Life and Fiction: Creating Character DepthTrue Life and Fictionhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/10194767305292360214noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8096600932757908629.post-61560918238267873772015-03-30T14:33:08.302-05:002015-03-30T14:33:08.302-05:00Thank you for your comment. I write in the same wa...Thank you for your comment. I write in the same way. My first draft is basically an exagerated outline. As for this excerpt, it is new. I just wrote it this last weekend in an attempt to provide more of Joseph's background other than 'military.' I'm still working out some issues with his service that surface later in the story. Again,, thanks. Your evaluation really brings light to some things I'd not considered. Of course, it all seemed perfect and brilliant to me as it always does in my own mind. I do not have your gmail. I noticed that your blog moved but the notice did not link to the new blog. I'm following now.True Life and Fictionhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10194767305292360214noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8096600932757908629.post-24438286655171934532015-03-30T13:12:32.235-05:002015-03-30T13:12:32.235-05:00I'm with you on letting the characters develop...I'm with you on letting the characters develop as the story progresses. I usually have a basic sense of what traits they need, but depth takes place during the first editing; my first drafts are a kind of outlining phase and I don't worry much over minor mistakes.<br /><br />As for this excerpt, it appears to be in the first draft stage. Its rough; more of a laundry list. His movements are mechanical, flat and emotionless. And the PTSD flashback is misplaced - there is nothing really to trigger such a vivid scene. The events from opening the security gate, getting fired, flashback, and arrival at the second job are too fast paced. Perhaps set him up in a rigid, normal daily routine so we get to know him as a person before throwing in all his troubles and quirks. Have you seen the movie Equalizer? See how his character is portrayed in his routine, but you just know there is something "off" in all that obsessive routine.<br /><br />I will beta read for you when you are ready. You still have my donnahole gmail?dolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.com